Tuesday, April 29, 2008

Poem challenge from HB.

I have never been much of a poetry lover, takes a bit too much brain power to understand the meaning behind the words in most cases but I've always liked this Emily Dickinson poem.  HB sent out a little challenge to change the words for your own poem, so I decided to give it a try.  Follow the links in the blogs to get to the initial challenge. 

The Original Version

I'm nobody! Who are you? 
Are you nobody, too? 
Then there's a pair of us = don't tell!
They"d banish us, you know

How dreary to be somebody
How public, like a frog
To tell your name the livelong day
To an admiring bog!


The Mim Version

I'm a Noodle!  Who are you? 
Are you a pasta, too? 
Then there's a big bowl of us - don't tell!
They'd eat us up, you know

How nice to be a noodle
How steamy, with a haze
You show your carbs the livelong day
To a hungry gaze! 

Silly, but fun

13 comments:

ksklein said...

lol..... great. you´ve got talent! :)

ksklein said...

I'm a Poodle! Who are you?
Are you a little dog, too?
Then there's a big howl of us - don't tell!
They'd beat us up, you know

How nice to be a poodle
How public, like a dog
To tell your name the livelong day
To an admiring bog!

somehow the nobody-noodle-poem encourages silliness!!
:)

ksklein said...

what is a bog?

ElizT said...

I'm Bog, are you?
Swampy too?
Wetlands, let's say,
We'll be drained one day.

Boring to be dry
Public like a park;
People on the seats,
Even in the dark.

ksklein said...

lol... this post with its comments is making my day.

sukipoet said...

Very cute poem, Mim. Saw the challenge on hb's blog. In fact, the hair on your sketch of the previous day, noodle like huh? Be well, Suki

Mim said...

You guys are so FUNNY! This is great, Kerstin - a bog is a swampy area that has actually grown over with an earth covering but if you dig down you get to water, it's like a lake covered with a thick carpet of moss and heather and other plants. It's lovely actually, but I could never figure out how it could "admire" anything.

Lynn said...

How clever you are! Wonderful poem, I love it.
And how great you got to meet FY and you her.

human being said...

wow!
Mim, this is marvelous... i'm drooling!... very impressive...
and the mood you created is so original... unique...
seriously... your imagination and creativity is as superb as your art... i love it so much...i put your link there in my blog...
thanks for accepting the challenge...

i love ksklein's and elizt's... very creative,too.
and all of them are not just funny... they also tell us something about life...
really enjoyed reading them...

Fern said...

Oh Mim, you silly noodle..

Debra Kay said...

Noodles-yum.....

marianne said...

Wonderful all these versions! Yours is yummy!

Michele said...

Greatness!