A bit of everything
Yes. I like the ambiguity; it could hold a command, and Walmart could be code for your name. In fact the whole thing could be in code.
It gives me a warm feeling, because it conveys so much more than just logistics. I see two people who care about each other, simply touching base.I am ok, I ateWon't be here when you arrive homeBargain prices call!
Eliz - you're right - is was a code..and it appears that Deb has decoded the overall message.
Cute post and comments too. Yes, methinks you are the next Basho.
who ate my spaghetti?who are you?where?
Or, 'I have burgled your house, will be back for the replaced electronics, I am everywhere'
Or,Been at the leftovers again?Get yourself back here!I thought I told you to go to Walmart!
Some really fun poems here, none of which are haiku (sorry to be a stick in the mud). But Haiku is usually set out as 5-7-5 syllables for the three lines.I ate spaghettiKnow that I will be right backRight after Walmart:) Please don't shoot me nowIt is part of the teachingTo the haiku poets:) :)
You all are too funny! this is great! I think I liked the progression of 4 - 3 - 2 as opposed to the traditional 5-7-5, even tho' it was totally unintentional.
Omigod, I was going to call foul, but I counted my syllables and was off one in the middle line. eeek.
blog post supreme.
Chuckling over all the comments.Sounds like Walmart is going to be back soon to eat more spagetti.You will need a pile more to fill it's belly. :)
It reminds me of that fantastic William Carlos Williams poem which also started out as something pinned to a fridge door:"This Is Just To Say" I have eatenthe plumsthat were inthe iceboxand whichyou were probablysavingfor breakfastForgive methey were deliciousso sweetand so cold
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